Rewriting AHM

Jack Cade · Post by **Jack Cade** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 10:39 am

Just looking at this retooling of issue one by Raptor718, which does rather demonstrate how easy it is to give AHM more life. I still don't think the characterisation of Starscream quite fits in with the -ations, but I like "These skies belong to us!" and Skywarp's 'Infiltration never was my style' - much better lines than McCarthy has given either of them.

Is it possible, do you think, to use this method to rewrite AHM into something truly credible? Failing that, I'd love to see someone do a comedy version.

Post by **spiderfrommars** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:30 am

Jack Cade wrote:Failing that, I'd love to see someone do a comedy version.

I think the comedy version is the one people have been shelling out for every month already.

stranger · Post by **stranger** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 1:00 pm

"Failing that, I'd love to see someone do a comedy version."

Damn, if any sentence sat up beautifully for a sweet volley into the bottom corner it was that one. Well played spiderfrommers.

To be honest, the rewrite someone posted on here (if the same one) is like plastering over shot plaster. It's still ****** underneath the cover-up job in that the story still is ultimately dull, predictable and cliche.

No amount of cool lines can clean it up IMHO.

Post by **Best First** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 1:47 pm

I certainly think it could be improved upon.

But ultimately just rewriting the speech bubbles is not going to get you away from the vapid pacing (i'm assuming that this is what has been done, not looked at the file).

I think if you condensed it fairly massivley, showed a lot more of what is happening elsewhere and dumped some clunky concepts such as cutting off New York being a tactical masterstroke then the notion of some kind of leak crippling the 'bots and sending the 'con cause into overdrive might be the start of an interesting status quo change.

Comedy on the other hand would be quite easy...

Jack Cade · Post by **Jack Cade** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 3:29 pm

Done. Fixed it:

http://www.4shared.com/file/80257311/f6 ... atron.html

Sunyavadin · Post by **Sunyavadin** » Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:14 pm

I considered just ripping off the AHM covers and sticking them on Rhythms of Darkness.

KJ · Post by KJ » Tue Jan 13, 2009 1:59 am

:lol:

Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. Page 2 is perfect!!!

*Furtive Grab* FTW

Mr_Tigg · Post by **Mr_Tigg** » Tue Jan 13, 2009 9:28 pm

I can't seem to get it to work - what program should I be opening it in??

KJ · Post by KJ » Wed Jan 14, 2009 1:09 am

C-Display is the most commonly used.

Alternatively, you can unzip the file like you would a normal .rar file, and then just read each page as an individual JPEG.

der2 · Post by **der2** » Fri Jan 16, 2009 5:55 pm

haha, thats awesome, great story and pace

Post by **snarl** » Sat Jan 17, 2009 10:09 am

I real triumph

Yaya · Post by **Yaya** » Sun Jan 18, 2009 4:05 pm

Not sure how to view this. (i'm computer illeterate)

Any suggestions that are easy that don't require downloading programs?

Post by **Best First** » Sun Jan 18, 2009 6:39 pm

That is easily the most entertainment AHM has offered. Bravo.

der2 · Post by **der2** » Sun Jan 18, 2009 6:58 pm

Jack Cade · Post by **Jack Cade** » Mon Jan 19, 2009 4:24 pm

No problems here. It's only a bit of fun.

Yaya · Post by **Yaya** » Mon Jan 19, 2009 9:49 pm

Hehe. "Cake?"

Good stuff.

Mr_Tigg · Post by **Mr_Tigg** » Mon Jan 19, 2009 10:21 pm

Lost it's way a bit with the seekers, but the constructicons were hilarious! burst out laughing at the 'furtive grab' part

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